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my application for :iconharvest-pokemoon: Lea didn't make into the second opening hoping she'll make it in for the next one. got a ton of people just itching to play with her.


Name:
Leana Seneal ( Lea )

Age:
20

Gender:
Female

Pokemon:
Sneasel :iconsneaselplz:

Height:
5'7"

Bodystyle:
Skinny-Curvey (mix of the two)

Birthday:
January 6

Home Island:
Amusement Archipelago

Personality:

Lea has a childish feel about her, she is easily distracted and has a mind or her own. She is curious, liking to learn new things never giving up a chance to have an adventure.  She may seem like a ditz at first glance but once someone gets to know her they see that her innocent exterior is actually willful and driven to accomplish more then what she has. Besides all this Lea is a caring person and likes to help anyone in need, she may be late to help but she will be pleased knowing that she tried.



History:
FAMILY HISTORY
-Mother - Weavile
Lea's mother is a Doctor M.D. in the towns main hospital, she works most all the time there. She has high hopes for her daughter to make a career in the same field as herself or something even better. She pushes Lea to do better then she really can and hates that Lea would rather spend time at the docks with her father doing hard labor and fighting like a boy. She is rather rash and harsh when talking which drives Lea to do things on impulse.
- Father - Feraligatr
Her father is the harbor owner of the docks in the town. He controls what comes in and goes out of the docks. This is where Lea sees all the animals and products that come in and out of town. Leas' mother is actually his second wife after Larences' mother died. He is charismatic and carefree giving his children the freedom to develop into what they want to be. Even though he gives Lea and Larence this freedom he does expect them to choose wisely in their decisions. He likes to work hard for everything that he owns teaching his kids to do the same.
- Larence - Larvitar
Lea's half brother was shy and withdrawn making him a prime target for teasing by bullies. He doesn't assert himself enough as Lea does, seeming to be sickly in some ways. This wimpy exterior causes Lea to want to defend him, mainly since she looks up to her elder sibling.


SCHOOLING
-pre school and elementary
Lea was just like most children starting out in school, a bit shy but making friends with everyone she met. She was active and out spoken making sure her opinion was heard, she also was a bit temperamental when someone was being mean taking a stand and protecting the victim. She would get in trouble for the way she would protect the person from another class mate giving her a bad front with the teachers. Getting past her defending ways she was a good enough student, passing her grades with high C's and B's.

- middle school
Once Lea started middle school she developed a vigorous sibling rivalry with her elder brother. From this rivalry developing Lea pushed herself more and more to impress her parents always trying to out do Larence. This was also the year Elliena was born making the family even larger.

-high school
The first year in high school for Lea was the last one that she would have in the private school. Her brother was being bullied even though he had grown into a young man, but this time it had been different from the other times. Lea had stepped in to help her brother out of his predicament. After this incident Larence wasnt bullied ever again but Lea didnt want to deal with anymore of it so she asked her parents if she could go elsewhere. Her parents sent Lea to live with her Aunt ( Eevee ) and Uncle ( Mightyena ) in a farmland area out side of town. This is where she meet her cousin Mari ( Eevee) , they soon became close friends. They did everything together, School, chores, everything. It wasn't long for Lea to see that what she had been doing all along was the wrong way to do things. Lea decided to change her way of acting becoming more civil when confronting others and also open to new things. She finished school with average grades not feeling pressured from her mother to get straight A's. She decided to move back to her home in the city not really wanting to leave her Uncles ranch. She was going to miss her best friend and all the animals that she had taken care of on the farm.

-Finding Raccolto
Lea had arrived home to her little sister being grown enough to run around and be a child. Larence was now a grown man working at the docks with their father lifting and carrying things onto and off ships. Lea's mother, a little disappointed in her daughters grades but still stuck on her going into the medical field. Lea decided to do as her brother did and work at the docks with their father. This is how she heard of a group of islands far in the ocean called Raccolto. She was fascinated by what she had heard and decided to visit the islands. Lea went with what money she had, finding what she found amazing. The animals she so wanted to take care of again and the kind of people she had always wanted to meet. Lea didn't have enough money to stay and buy or even rent a property to start out her ranch. She went home working harder then she had before, wanting so desperately to go back to the islands in the sea and start her own life.

Job: Rancher

Ranch Name : A Distance Away

Dog Race:
Houndour

Dog name:
Rotten

Dog Gender:
Female

Talents:

* good enough cook
* fast, agile
* can stand cold temperatures , prefers it actually.
* good origination skills. (from loading ships.)
* making felt doll key chains. ( random i know.)
* Plays guitar (mainly hobby so not too good -w- )


Funfacts:

:bulletblack: Takes over-the-top care of her shiny stone on her forehead. Only because its something that is shiny and can glow in the dark.
:bulletblack: Loves bows and things that can go in her hair.
:bulletblack: Likes Mint Chocolate Chip ice cream.
:bulletblack: The meaning behind the ranches name is because she had waited too long to be able to live on her own and to find a place that makes her happy but it is still a ways away.
:bulletblack: Lea needs glasses to read but she doesn't like others to know.
:bulletblack: The only hot beverage she likes is Coffee' and hot chocolate. Preferably mixed together.
:bulletblack: Owes a favor to Gregory(owned by :iconrabidpan:)


Bad Habits:
:bulletred: - overly enthusiastic when it comes to sweets.
:bulletred: - Chews on locks of hair from time to time, and bites her nails.
:bulletred: - Gets caught out in rain storm more often then none. ends up losing her house keys and being locked out. </s>
:bulletred: - When shes nervous her voice grows in pitch to the point that she seems to be yelling.
:bulletred: - She is constantly rubing her forehead stone to make sure it is shining bright.

Family:

Larence (half brother) [Larvitare]
( Dislikes the city life and is thinking of following his sister to the island. Dislikes the idea but what else is there.)

Elliena (little sister) [Sneasel]
(Lives with her every so often mainly on holidays accompanied on the ship by one or all other family members. Mostly their father and brother.)

Mother [Weavile]
(Doesn't get out of the office much and may only hear from her/see her around holidays.)

Father [Feraligator]
( Loves going to see his daughter (s) bringing Lea random trinkets he finds, buys, or lots of pictures of Larence and Mother.)


Likes:
:bulletblue: Bows and hair accessory's/shiny things.
:bulletblue: Rain clouds.
:bulletblue: The night/ darkness also anything that resembles the night sky
:bulletblue: Ice, and snow. Anything cold.
:bulletblue: Sweets; anything that has sugar really.
:bulletblue: Fluffy things (tails, hair, if it looks soft she wants to touch it)
:bulletblue: The number 8. Sideways its the symbol for infinity.

Dislikes:
:bulletred: Heat/ summer sun
:bulletred: Fish ( the only cat that doesn't) she hates em'.
:bulletred: Someone that bullies others.
:bulletred: Making others sad (unless she meant to)
:bulletred: Large body's of water to were she couldn't see land (gets sea sick)




Ability: Keen Eye -- Opponent cannot lower this Pokémon’s accuracy.
This ability just helps her out to see things that others normally wouldn't. Or to catch things others wouldn't. Normally this ability kicks in when she is about to fall down, it doesn't always stop her from "hugging" the ground though.

Pokémon Moveset:
:bulletwhite: Ice Shard - Lea will freeze her finger tips to make daggers or a sword like figure. sometimes she uses it like any normal person would making small chunks of ice the throw at others.
:bulletwhite: Slash - This attack is exactly what it says it is, a slashing movement that will normally cut the targeting area.
:bulletwhite: Taunt - Lea will taunt someone or something to encourage it to attack or just to make the thing frustrated enough to falter.
:bulletwhite: Protect - Lea creates a clear bubble like barrier around herself and anyone that is near her. The barrier only can reach about 4 feet away from the source ( aka: Lea). The " Protect" covers all fields of attack excluding Water, ghost , and any ground based attack like magnitude.



Comment or Note me if you would like to rp with Lea. Preferably comment.

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im done i guess..hopefully shes good enough for the group. i really hope so. -w- also im going to update her application picture because from when i drew it my style has changed.
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BananaTaco Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Holy buckets, I love her >////< I hope you get in, she is really good ~<3
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kitzune-griffith Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
hehe thank you i hope so too.
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CeruleanViceroy Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2012  Student Digital Artist
aww~ shes cute >w<
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kitzune-griffith Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
hehe thank you >w<
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CeruleanViceroy Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2012  Student Digital Artist
your welcome! :la:
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ElfSama Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Back for another critique!
And boy, do I have to say the changes are wonderful!

Her personality makes sense now with little contradictions, and her history is much more rounded.
I like the change to the mother's job, and I like that Lea learned of the islands from the docks, since Raccolto will be getting shipments by sea often. So this was a nice detail.
I think her having the cousin as a good friend is great, and the ranch work there will help connect her to starting her own ranch on the islands!

In all, the changes are lovely so far and I have a much better sense of who Lea is and what she is like.
My only request might be changing her age to 20? Unless she graduated high school at 17. If she graduated at the age of 18, then she might need another year to save up enough money for her ranch and travel fees. However, if you add in the history that she graduated at age 17, then perhaps we can keep her age at 19.

As for a pet, I think Snubble would fit her well. Imagine putting adorable bows about those ears?

Anyway, good work!
I can't wait to see the finished app!
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kitzune-griffith Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
hehe thank you, i decided to stick with my original choice of Houndour since she has always been a faithful companion and Cinnamon Bun ( ~rosecat96 's pets friend ) and for her graduation age i was 17 when i graduated and hadnt seen the problem -w- ill see if i can add that in so it makes since. i greatly appreciate everything that you have said and done to help me and i will be submitting her for group approval soon. after some more things
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rabidpan Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012
Hate to agree but right now hun your character is looking very mary sue ish. What's she bad at if she learns things the first time around? And her sister lives with her a week from the month? I don't understand? Her little sister goes on a boat alone to go back to their parents and comes every so oftent o live with Lea? Oh and she wasn't petting his hair I forgot why she hit him lol
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kitzune-griffith Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
hehe yah i know now that in explanation she is too mary-sue. even though i know shes not. i just have a hard time getting things down on paper that make sense. -w- well in this case computer. im gonna change a lot of things and move others around to make it easier to understand / read.
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rabidpan Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012
Yeah. well if you need proof reading you can always ask c:
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kitzune-griffith Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
okay. -w- your just too nice to me. thank you ^///^
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rabidpan Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2012
You're welcome c:
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Heatheru Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012
Birth date is incomplete. (Elfsama has already mentioned this)

Personality is confusing, aspects such as treating others as younger siblings--why is she like this? What makes her competitive? Might be good to briefly explain this in the personality section--it seems kind of random at the moment and disconnected from her history.

History: Elfsama has done a fantastic job addressing many of the issues with this section--I will try and not be too redundant here.

The use of the term "lost cause" (a cause with no chance of success) does not suit this situation, I would suggest rewording this sentence, perhaps stating that her fears were "baseless".

Instead of labeling her mother as a generic "super-star" I think that giving her a solid foundation in some aspect of society will help you leaps and bounds with pulling your character away from something fanciful and back to earth. Elf's suggestions are perfect for amending this, so I highly recommend considering them. By giving Lea childhood friendships you will eliminate the this two-dimensional image of a celebrity-obsessed student body and not only brighten up her back-story, but bring some interesting qualities to it. Consider what each of these friendships means to Lea and how they have affected her interests.

Be sure to explain the cause for your character's interest in Astrology (or Astronomy) and her work at the night clinic. Her personal interests (and talents) should be an important part of her reasons for moving to the Raccolto area. Do keep in mind that without a proper background in medicine she probably should only be some kind of volunteer, and that it would be difficult for a student to work the night-shift at a clinic while going to school full-time.

Her little sister's condition seems a bit contradictory as well, seeing that Pokerus (I think this is what you meant by Poke'Rushe) would (as you say) allow Ela to develop much faster than expected. This implies that her younger sister aged more quickly, both mentally and physically--and yet you have given her some behavioral anomalies (speech impediment for one) that seem to contradict this previous statement. Also with school and working (or volunteering) at a clinic, I don't see how Lea would have any time left to take care of baby Ela--so dropping her parents responsibility for this child gives your character an unfair and unbelievable burden to master.

I'm also very confused about this sentence, "Soon Lea could feel the pull of her calling just nagging at her from the inside till she couldn't take it anymore." I'll be honest here, my initial conclusion was that Lea was somehow sick of taking care of Ela, assuming that "the pull of her calling" was your way of describing the child you just announced that Lea was taking care of primarily in the last sentence. However, I realize now (while reading Elf's critique) that this might be your vague way of saying that Lea felt the desire to move out. This definitely needs to be explained, like Elf mentioned--check out what her parents do, what Lea's interests are, where they come from and what friends she has--and then decide what might make her decide to move out and so far away from home.

The coming and going part seems like something that could be omitted--instead of having Lea "return" home to raise money, why not find a way for her to earn it before leaving home altogether? Try to keep this realistic, because I agree--modeling isn't something you simply pick up and up to this point in your history you haven't really explained what made her parents wealthy and if she shares any talent with her mother or father that relates to modeling. Instead of this, maybe her parents could loan her the money? Or she could work at some job part-time?

Finally, make certain you explain why your character is going to settle on running a Farm, Ranch, or Business--having Lea open a ranch without giving any indication for why she might do this is absolutely random. Consider what animals are available to have on a ranch and which if any might pique Lea's interest--or if perhaps opening a farm or business might be better suited to her background.
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kitzune-griffith Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you every little thing helps, ill be sure to make all necessary changes. ill have her up to tip top shape in no time thanks to all the help that all of you have given me. thank you.
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Heatheru Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012
No problem!
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ElfSama Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Hello,
Just a friendly mod stopping by to give the critique!
I hope this will be constructive for you ;v;

One, remember to put her day of birth on. She can't just be born in January without a day.

Personality:
"--when she first meets someonebeing shy and unsure to being over protective of her close friends." Perhaps, besides correcting grammar, make the last part a separate sentence. Such as, "She is shy and unsure when is first meeting someone, but overly protective of her close friends."
This will make more sense to people, since it was a little confusing.

However, this conflicts with her other personality trait of treating everyone like younger siblings. Can you describe this more? If she is shy, then how can she treat someone as a younger sibling when that seems like a very close relationship? Perhaps she only treats friends and family as siblings?

Try to not make her personality all over the place. It is hard for other people to understand her if it is like this.

Also, leave out the part about Greg and put it in fun facts as it help clean up the personality. Not everyone knows Greg, so this could confuse people. Since you already have that in fun facts though, instead of putting the icon of the owner, put the link to the app since that is more important.

History:
First off, why does her older brother need her to defend him? Is he weak and frail, sickly? Go into why he needs to be protected by his younger sister in elementary school.

Why was she expelled from middle school? Unless the middle school and elementary are attached, she must have done something to ruin her record.

Having a super-star modeling mother of perfection is a little bit too much. Perhaps, instead, you could make her a local model, or a higher up-business woman. Something that is less flashy, but still allowed enough money to get her into a private school.

Try giving her at least one or two friends while she's in middle school. The unpopular crowd would likely adopt her if she got close to them. Instead of making her life into an utter lonely sorrow, give her some small happiness. Have these close unpopular friends be with her through her school life till graduation, as is common to happen. Do not pick things that dramatize her life beyond realistic belief.

Astrology and the stars? Did you perhaps mean Astronomy, the study of the stars? Astrology can be a nice hobby, checking on personality traits and fortunes, however Astronomy seems more like a serious study focus and a class that could actually be in a school.

How did she get a job at a night clinic in high school? Without training, the most she could be is a secretary at the front counter, checking people in, or a janitor. Without any previous medical training, she would not be allowed to nurse people to health. She could be a candy striper, thus a volunteer that cleans the sheets, talks to the patients and makes them feel better? This is a more realistic option, however will not get her the money she wants. Perhaps have a small side job, like in the grocery store, instead, while having her be a volunteer.

Having a little sister born is great, however giving her that disease is not. It is incredibly rare and will likely make the other mods feel that she has too much a Mary Sue history with too much drama or special things. Instead, either have her sister simply born, or give her a small, more common, illness found in infants.

What was the calling that nagged her? I know she becomes a rancher, but it doesn't say. What made her want to become a rancher so suddenly? Had taking care of her little sister been so much fun that she decided ranching and caring for animals would be just as much fun? There is no mention of any pets or animals in her history, so it is unlikely she knows how to ranch.
Perhaps a Business in Astronomy would be better? Since she seemed to study it? Or give her some experience in her life that lead to her learning to care for animals.

Instead of having her return and become a model, which is very unlikely as modeling takes time and training to become good, perhaps have her return to some small job, or have her work at a shelter so she gets that needed animal experience, as well as the money, to go buy her ranch and get started.

Also, make breaks in the history as it can be hard to read when it it all crushed together like this.

And, keep in mind that having a modeling mother will be hard. She'd had three children, so her stretch marks over her stomach would be terrible, especially if she was very thin before the first baby. So you might want to think through her line of work.

Other Information:
If she wants to be a rancher, she better know how to tell what gender her dog is. If she can't bend over and observe the genitals, then you might want to give her a new occupation.

In her talents remove 'Can learn things the first time around.' This makes her seem too perfect, and no one can learn everything the first time.
And again, astronomy or astrology? If it's about stars and why they are made, then astronomy is the one. If it's about fortunes, then astrology.
Was charismatic the word you were looking to spell?

In all, remember to correct your grammar and spelling, be sure to focus on her faults. Faults are very important because it is what makes up human. She can not be a perfect being, and she does need more faults of her own.

Again, I hope this was constructive,
And thank you for reading all of it!
Good luck getting in!
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kitzune-griffith Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you, everything that you said will help me to fix her up more. -w- ill see what i can do to fix it all. ^w^ thank you.
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karmastrike Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012
She looks great, but you might want to check your grammar. I see a lot of sentences that don't start with capitals. Oh and if your having problems with spelling try out the firefox browser, it comes with a spell check.
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kitzune-griffith Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you, I already know of all the spelling errors and i plan to fix them all. I'm grateful for your advice, thank you. ^w^
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karmastrike Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012
No problem, I'm glad to help. ::):
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RosenAdoptionCentre Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Dude you made so many of this app XD
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kitzune-griffith Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
ita all the same app. im just trying to make it perfect so it can beat down any other app that might stand in its way.. im so tired of messing with it now........*dies from no sleep*
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RosenAdoptionCentre Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Aaah go to sleep!
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kitzune-griffith Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
i am going to lol i want to make my broke bone pain go away first... i cant sleep with it hurting like is.
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RosenAdoptionCentre Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2012  Student Digital Artist
O,o if you broke something you go to the nearest emergency
If you leave it like that, that's horrible!,
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kitzune-griffith Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
naww its fine its been broken before and since its a pinnky toe there isnt really anything that anyone can do.
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RosenAdoptionCentre Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2012  Student Digital Artist
D:
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Crystal38470 Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
ive been thinking about joining that group for a long time! :la:
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kitzune-griffith Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
its an amazing group. friendly and caring. everyone seems to want to help out and they encourage you to try your best. its the best thing ever.
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Crystal38470 Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
you make me want to join more! :omg:
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kitzune-griffith Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
hehe im glad >///<
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Crystal38470 Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
i shall join one day! :dummy:
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rabidpan Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012
I see you changed her history and some stuff about her ' 0' She still owes Greg though.
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kitzune-griffith Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
yup i know. hehe that doesnt change. and yah alot has changed but its still the same.. -ish. i just have to finish writing her personality alot was left out and needs to be fixed. and my spelling is crude. -n-
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rabidpan Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2012
You can always write it in a word doc and it will spell check your stuff c:
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kitzune-griffith Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
naw i dont have the program loaded into word that spell checks or i would have done it already. *sigh* but now biggy. my fiance is my adomatic spell check. only when i can get him to read it.. he gets fustrated and a head-ack.. hehe
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rabidpan Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012
Lol poor guy. Have him check over your spelling on your app though. It's got quite some work.
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kitzune-griffith Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
yes he does.. i feel sorry for him sometime. why he chose me with his spelling OCD-ish-ness. i will never know.
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rabidpan Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012
Awe. A person doesn't like you 'cause of your spelling abilities silly x3
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kitzune-griffith Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
i know. he feel for me because i looked him in the eyes when we talked other then looking away. and being scared of him.
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